So, this is the end of the semester, and I'm listening to my paper print out as we speak. I took suggestions from both Professor Petrik and my mother (English major and editor extraordinaire), and I'm fairly pleased with how it came out. I moved my discussion of earlier commemorations to earlier in the paper, and mostly adjusted my sentence structure, changed a few things grammatically.
I would have liked to have talked a lot more, because I didn't say everything I had to say. Professor Petrik wanted me to include more about the background of the two men, and how that influenced their thinking, as well as the artistic style of the monuments. I chose not to take that advice, because it's already 14 pages long, and I could write a book about the monuments exemplifying 1930s style, or about the backgrounds of Borglum and Ziolkowski.
I'm taking a copy of the paper out to Crazy Horse with me next month to hand present it to the sculptor's daughter who I interviewed.
It was a great semester, guys. We did it!